Here's the story scoop: Laina is one of the last surviving humans after earth was destroyed when the humans tried to kill the cyborgs they'd created when the cyborgs rebelled and escaped. Now the Cyborgs, with permission of the Galactic High Council have free rein to pursue the last remnants of the human race and do with them as they see fit. Rorik, a cyborg lieutenant stumbles upon Laina hiding in a ship and he captures her, thinking to get information about the whereabouts of other humans. But when the cyborg doctor on Rorik's ship runs tests on Laina, a genetic anomaly in her hand raises questions and he suddenly wonders if Laina might hold the key to the survival of the cyborg race. Can he learn to trust and love his sworn enemy if it means he might save his people?
Rorik has just been visiting with his Captain and learned that according to the genesis diary, human descendants of the scientists who created the cyborgs may have carried genetic dna markers that will allow the cyborgs to complete their own dna wholes and produce children. Laina is currently locked up in the brig and being strangled by a cyborg, but poor Rorik has no idea. (please ignore creative punctuation)
He
was halfway through the control when Julian stopped him.
“You
see Erik? He’s been missing, didn’t show up for his watch assignment.”
Rorik
froze in his tracks; Erik was the one of their Legion who truly hated humans.
He’d spent decades in a human prison, tortured daily until Alaric and the
others could rescue him; since then he’d never been the same. Something had
broken inside him and they’d nicknamed him the Berserker, like back in the Scottish
Highlands early in human history. He couldn’t be trusted with humans; he was a
loose cannon full of killing rage, and apparently he was missing…
“Did
he know we have a human on board?” Rorik ground out harshly as he started to
jog to the shift elevator at the end of the hallway.
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Uh oh!! Run faster, Rorik!
ReplyDeleteSomething I noticed, Lauren, is that the para full of information slows the scene down a little bit, taking away from the urgency. Just a thought. Maybe it's just me :-)
I'm loving this story!
thanks Teresa! I'll work on the info dump when I revise. :)
DeleteWhen I read this...I started singing, "I need a hero...I'm holding out for a hero till the morning light! Ha ha. Go be that hero Rorik! I'm with Teresa on the info dump. But I'm sure you'll be able to work that info in with the story : ) I liked knowing a bit more of the history of the humans and cyborgs. Sounds like we humans were not so nice at the start of this confrontation.
ReplyDeleteHe's better get there fast!
ReplyDeleteGreat excerpt, Lauren! When do you think this story will be finished? Will it be published with Samhain or do you ePublish as well?
ReplyDeleteHoping Rorik is a fast runner!!! Really loving this story, can't wait to read the entire thing - another terrific snippet.
ReplyDeleteLove how his concern is immediately about her safety. Good tension.
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