Sunday, September 8, 2013

Across the Stars- sneak peek 9-8-13

Below is a snippet from my latest WIP called Across the Stars. It's a SFR or Sci-Fi Romance.

Here's the story scoop: Laina is one of the last surviving humans after earth was destroyed when the humans tried to kill the cyborgs they'd created when the cyborgs rebelled and escaped. Now the Cyborgs, with permission of the Galactic High Council have free rein to pursue the last remnants of the human race and do with them as they see fit. Rorik, a cyborg lieutenant stumbles upon Laina hiding in a ship and he captures her, thinking to get information about the whereabouts of other humans. But when the cyborg doctor on Rorik's ship runs tests on Laina, a genetic anomaly in her hand raises questions and he suddenly wonders if Laina might hold the key to the survival of the cyborg race. Can he learn to trust and love his sworn enemy if it means he might save his people?

Last week we left off with Rorik having found Laina and he has asked one of his crew mates, another cyborg Julian, to secure her so they can take her to their ship and question her. Laina punched him in the groin and tried to run away, only to have Rorik stun her with his phaser.


          
The control room was silent, except for the occasional system alert beeping, as he walked over to the unconscious woman. A small cut above her left eye from where she’d hit the floor was bleeding. An emotion he’d never felt before wormed its way to his chest: pity. He pitied this little human. She was so weak, so breakable, like the rest of her race. And yet she was brave enough to trick him and his team. It was a pity that humans had so many obvious failings. It ruined the few strengths they had.




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15 comments:

  1. Enter "pity"! Awesome!

    Love these lines, Lauren: "It was a pity that humans had so many obvious failings. It ruined the few strengths they had."

    Okay, got my "Across The Stars" fix for this week. You know I'll be back. :-)

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  2. Nice snippet. I like how the character has a distinct way of thinking- it's set apart.
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  3. It was his first time feeling pity... but maybe more than pity, as he's more and more attracted to Laina.

    I will definitely be back for the next 8 - great snippet, Lauren! :)

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  4. Talk about a back handed compliment LOL. It's fascinating watching him develop feelings for her...excellent excerpt!

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  5. Super intriguing snippet! I want to read more of this for sure.

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  6. I love this story. Can't wait for more.

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  7. I'm glad he at least feels pity for her. I hope she's able to regain the upper hand. Intriguing snippet, Lauren.

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  8. Hmm, the beginnings of something deeper stirring there. I like it. Great snippet this week.

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  9. Very well done! Love the emotion from a char unused to having an emotional response.

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  10. I can just see this guy puzzling over her...ha, he doesn't know what kind of ride he's in for! Chalk one up for the tough resourceful girl!

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  11. Love the observations of humans on his part, and the character you created in him. His reasoning is accurate too. I figured he'd admire her a bit for her fortitude. I'm enjoying your story.
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  12. He is so perplexed by her...love it! Great tension!

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  13. it's fascinating watching Rorik examine his feelings about her. great 8 with his POV giving us more insight on how most of the cyborgs probably view the humans

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