Below is a snippet from my latest WIP called Across the Stars. It's a SFR or Sci-Fi Romance.
Here's the story scoop: Laina is one of the last surviving humans after earth was destroyed when the humans tried to kill the cyborgs they'd created when the cyborgs rebelled and escaped. Now the Cyborgs, with permission of the Galactic High Council have free rein to pursue the last remnants of the human race and do with them as they see fit. Rorik, a cyborg lieutenant stumbles upon Laina hiding in a ship and he captures her, thinking to get information about the whereabouts of other humans. But when the cyborg doctor on Rorik's ship runs tests on Laina, a genetic anomaly in her hand raises questions and he suddenly wonders if Laina might hold the key to the survival of the cyborg race. Can he learn to trust and love his sworn enemy if it means he might save his people?
Last week we left off with Laina having climbed into the ceiling of her room by moving a tile out of the way and crawling up inside. Rorik and his cyborg crew have boarded the alien Nubra ship transporting Laina and are speaking to Captain Zore who locked Laina in her chambers.
“Rorik,
the female’s chamber is empty,” Alanna said as she slid her long silver knife back into the
sheath strapped to her thigh; it seemed she viewed the woman as a threat and
had been prepared.
Rorik
turned his attention to Zore, his brows lowering.
The
captain licked his lips nervously. “She was there, I swear it. After you hailed
us and gave your instructions, I sealed her in her room and didn’t release her
even when she begged me to open the door.” Guilt darkened Zore’s face.
Rorik
was momentarily caught up in that singular emotion. What was it about the human
female that called to Zore and caused guilt over betraying worthless filth like
her, didn’t he know what humans were capable of?
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I like Zore ;) and l am enjoying these snippets.
ReplyDeleteThanks Gemma! Zore is a good guy, brave enough to stand up to the arrogant hero lol.
DeleteBIG smile! I like it, Lauren! The complexity of the characters is already developing.
ReplyDeleteI know that Laina has to be captured for the story to happen, but I find myself hoping her hiding spot is good enough! lol.
Nice 8 :-)
Lol so glad you're enjoying it and rooting for Laina!
DeleteI really like what's been going on in this story and like Teresa I hope her hiding spot works but know it won't. Also, in my humble opinion, you don't need to tell me that Alana viewed the woman as a threat and had been prepared...just sheathing a big @$$ knife gets the point across that she meant some business when she entered that room. : )
ReplyDeleteThanks Millie! I'll look into fixing the knife part! :)
DeleteInteresting to know a bit more about the other characters. Laina sounds like a problem...excellent excerpt!
ReplyDeleteThanks for stopping by Veronica!
DeleteEnjoyed the story premise. Like the twist that the cyborgs are the good guys.
ReplyDeleteThanks Cara! I definitely want the cyborgs to be "good guys" but they've got a history with humans that's dark and so it makes for good conflicts.
DeleteDefinitely an interesting snippet - and nice twist beween good guys/bad guys. I also have to wonder about Zore & Rorik. - Nicely done.
ReplyDeleteLol, seems like Zore is winning some good fans here lol.
DeleteYou've really hooked me with these excerpts. Well done.
ReplyDeleteThank you Elaine! This being by first SFR, I'm hoping the story is engaging and interesting!
DeleteToo bad Zore isn't the hero, sounds like things would go smoother. But conflict is always fun. ;)
ReplyDeleteHahah Another Zore fan! I may have to write him a story.
DeleteLove the conflict!! Tweeted.
ReplyDeleteThanks Ella!!
DeleteOoo, Zore is intriguing. Definitely want to know more about him and why he's so fascinated with the human female. Great 8!
ReplyDeleteThank you for stopping by Karen! Glad you like Zore and the snippet!
DeleteOK, first let me say si-fi isn't something I normally read. Movies yes, but not books. But this, this I would read. The storyline is excellent. I think you can leave off, "it seemed she viewed the woman as a threat and had been prepared." No need to tell us because you did quite well in showing us by Alanna putting away her drawn sword. Great snippet!
ReplyDeleteThank you Cindy! It makes me feel good to know this story is enjoyed by non SFR readers. i really want to reach an audience that wouldn't normally pick up this genre. I'm definitely takin a look at the Alanna part with the blade since that's suggested and I agree!
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