Below is a snippet from my latest WIP called Across the Stars. It's a SFR or Sci-Fi Romance.
Here's the story scoop: Laina is one of the last surviving humans after earth was destroyed when the humans tried to kill the cyborgs they'd created when the cyborgs rebelled and escaped. Now the Cyborgs, with permission of the Galactic High Council have free rein to pursue the last remnants of the human race and do with them as they see fit. Rorik, a cyborg lieutenant stumbles upon Laina hiding in a ship and he captures her, thinking to get information about the whereabouts of other humans. But when the cyborg doctor on Rorik's ship runs tests on Laina, a genetic anomaly in her hand raises questions and he suddenly wonders if Laina might hold the key to the survival of the cyborg race. Can he learn to trust and love his sworn enemy if it means he might save his people?
Last week we left off with Rorik having discovered Laina hiding in the ceiling. He shot the ceiling tile out from under her and she fell to the ground.
When he stepped toward her, his boots scraped over the floor of the control room startling her. The woman whimpered and clenched her body into an even tighter fetal position. Concern flashed through him, but he forced it to dissipate. She couldn’t have been injured, the fall wasn’t that high. Even if she had been hurt, it was none of his concern. He would hand her over to Alaric, the captain of the Orion, and others would see to her questioning. He had to focus on the mission. Secure her, question her, sell her. That’s what they did with humans.
Oh, love the flash of emotion you slipped into this snippet. Great job!
ReplyDeleteThank you Jess!
DeleteGreat snippet!! I tweeted.
ReplyDeleteThank you Ella! I appreciate the tweet!
DeleteWow--powerful: "Secure her, question her, sell her." I feel her fear. Nice job, Lauren. Very nice! I like this story :-)
ReplyDeleteThank you Teresa! I'm glad you like it!
DeleteLove that he's trying to keep his focus and yet...! Great snippet.
ReplyDeleteLol thanks Gemma, poor Rorik is in for a real distraction!
DeleteInteresting snippet this week. Seems like he's a bit conflicted. I really feel for her, she's having a really rough day!
ReplyDeleteI'm so glad you felt for Laina, she is in a tough spot!
DeleteIt's just not going to be that easy, I hate to tell him! Excellent excerpt, loving the story!
ReplyDeletethank you Veronica! I'm so glad you could stop by!
DeleteOh, I love the premise of this. And the snippet was really good. That poor girl. It's hard being human sometimes.
ReplyDeleteThanks Kayci! It's definitely hard being human lol.
DeleteI love that he cares, even though he's trying not to. Terrific snippet!
ReplyDeleteyes, Rorik is definitely going to get soft and gentle (at least on the inside) where Laina is concerned. Should be fun to read!
DeleteI like the character you created in him. He is a bit conflicted. I sense a twinge of concern he is trying to talk himself out of. I can see this story as a movie at the drive-in. :)
ReplyDeleteThanks Cindy! You nailed Rorik's character completely!
DeleteThis excerpt makes me want to know more about this world! You create great dramatic tension in only a few lines. :)
ReplyDeleteThanks Alex! I'm so glad you liked it!
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